The graph shows data about annual earnings of three bakeries in London 2000-2010
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demonstrate
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London's three different bakeries between 2000 and 2010.
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of
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Sofia
and Use synonyms
Cake
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Lab
had been illustrated significantly increasing during the decade Use synonyms
while
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,
Buns had been shown a fluctuation decrease from pick point in these years.
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Sofia
's rise which was stability about 5 years, but after 2006 depicted Use synonyms
sharply
grow from 65.000 to 105.000. Correct article usage
a sharply
On the other hand
, another baker Linking Words
Cake
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Lab
was not as popular as Use synonyms
Sofia
, despite climbing Use synonyms
and
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Cake
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Lab
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also
recorded steadiness Linking Words
approximately
4 years from 2004 to 2008 by 40.000
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for approximately
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third
baker Buns Correct article usage
the third
feced
with an oscillation changes and had been dramatically downed to Correct your spelling
faced
fenced
feed
weak
point which was in 2010 and consisted Correct article usage
a weak
35000
. Buns' trend Change preposition
of 35000
also
had been crossed with Linking Words
Sofia
in 2006 and Use synonyms
Cake
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Lab
in 2009.Use synonyms
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