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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that the optimal solution to reduce the
traffic
 accidents is to raise the driving required aged.
Although
 I agree with
this
 approach has some effect in the short terms I think the better solution is to impose the stricter laws. On the one hand, young people are not aware of the consequences of what they do.
To begin
 with, they are more likely to drive a motorbike and a car with a high speed and easy to violate the
traffic
 rules and they
also
 have tended to run a red light, so many accidents happened by the younger. It is reasonable to require drivers who need to be old enough to join the
traffic
 themselves.
Moreover
, the older people are having more experience,
therefore
, they are more capable of handling some situations on the roads. There are some researches show that almost of the road accidents are caused by younger drivers than the seniority.
For example
, there are many cases of younger do not wear the helmets when they are driving and speeding due to an unexpected death.
On the other hand
, increasing the driver’s age is only one of the measures to minimize the
traffic
 accidents.
Initially
, children should be taught when studying in the primary school about the safe way when joining
traffic
.
For instance
, that project will help students understand the results of misbehaving in
traffic
 and they can tell their parents when taking them from school to home.
Furthermore
, the government needs to give some strict law for the
traffic
 offender
such
 as a longer prison sentences for serious offence and fine a significant money in cases of driving without helmet, run a red light and drunk driving. To sum up,
although
 restricting the people who can drive by their age, it is more important that people be educated about what they can and cannot do.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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