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Some people believe that in order for a hobby to be enjoyable, it needs to be difficult in some way. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #hobby
Hobby is enjoyable, if it is difficult in some way. Most of the people believe that and my personal opinion too. Every individual has their own habits and they are directed towards the repeated actions, which they like.
On the other hand
, easy
task
 would help them to continue their favourite practices. Let’s have a discussion, how hobbies contributes in our personal life and the difference between the enjoyable hobby and the difficult
task
 one, could it keep us interested?
Firstly
, every different tasks with the same favourite activity, encourage us to continue without skipping it.
Secondly
, a different approach always helps to keep the activities live.
For Instance
, swimming practice can be done in a pool, but repeated action makes you feel boring and if you change the location,
such
 as river or sea shore, which will be more difficult and help you to be more interested in your activity.
Finally
, the same activity with varied
task
 could be more attractive and I agree on that. On the other, it is worth mentioning, too much heavier
task
 would lead to skip your hobby.
For example
, one of my neighbourhood named Ramesh was interested in exercise on a routine basis and he was obese. He joined a gym club, he thought his interest would be fulfilled as well as help to reduce weight. After a few months, he experienced difficulties to do the
task
 and
finally
 give up. It is a balanced action and it should be managed well. A hobby should be more interested and make us happy, which could be done by including various
task
Suggestion
tasks
, at the same time it should not heavier, which would lead to skip. I could not agree on both the extreme, a balanced condition could be better.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of accomplishment
  • overcoming obstacles
  • gratifying
  • continuous source of enjoyment
  • relaxing activities
  • unwind and de-stress
  • counterproductive
  • mental break
  • subjective
  • personal preference
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