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Homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world. What do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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With growing
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 more and more competition is coming on the market which can cause difficulty finding jobs which can lead to rise in the unemployment and the increase in more homeless. In
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 we will discuss and give big picture about the cause of
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 problem and find best suitable precautions to be taken against it. Well to start with, with rapid growth on
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 and new technology nowadays, there is more and more competition in the market and in job
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 it was in the old days. Which makes unsecure to the employees, and it is hard for the older
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 to compete with present more highly educated and young
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 is one reason which can lead to homelessness in many developed cities around the world.
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, the person who has been working in an office for 10 years and he is old will have experience, but he might not have got new skills and speed what a new educated and young person can do even if he don't have experience, he might have technical skills which can do the same work quickly and with more efficiently. But there are some precautions which can be taken, some of that might be making them educate and providing them with training and keeping up-to date all the employees with the new developed technology so they don't slack back from the current
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. Another thing they can do is to keep motivated them with some kind of reward after achieving some kind of task. In conclusion, In my opinion homelessness in increasing due to competition, but it is not impossible to overcome it, we should focus and educate themselves to keep-up with the new
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 so they are not left back.
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