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Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries. Others however, believe it is unnecessary because TV and the Internet can give all the same information. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People have different views about whether travelling is the best way to obtain knowledge about other countries, while some individuals believe that people can get information about foreign countries via browsing and watching television, In my opinion people can get an adequate information about other countries if they visit these areas personally. On the one hand, there are several reasons for why the majority of the people opt for travelling and sightseeing naturally rather than travelling vicariously.
Firstly
, people would be able to make new connections and friends, which are essential to country and people.
Secondly
, many people actually watch programmes about places they have been to, or which they intend to visit
Moreover
, when people destined to different areas, they gain knowledge not only geographically but
also
 about cultures and as well as various customs.
For example
, a study has shown that when people travel personally to other countries, they get hands on experience about their heritage.
On the other hand
, travelling vicariously saves one's money and time. It is unquestionable that advance technology, including internet and television have all sorts of information.
For instance
, with the help of TV and the internet we can travel around the world.
In addition
, if some people wish to visit difficult access continent,
such
 as Antarctica, which is hard to get there, thanks to harsh weather, but they can obtain all kinds of intelligence with the click of a button on the basis of the internet
Furthermore
, TV channels like " Discovery" and " National Geo" can offer a wealth of fascinating programmes that can captivate viewers more than direct experience. In conclusion, while many people believe that there are some benefits to gain ability about different countries through the Internet, but I believe HD images can not replace the excitement of meeting new people and discovering their culture.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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