write a paragraph about the person you would like to become

I used to have a dream that I would be Selena Gomez.
Firstly
, I have a strong passion for music. I can sing everywhere and
everytime
without
feel
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feeling
bored.
Moreover
, when I was tired and dismayed, I always listen to music, which is the only thing that keeps me excited again.
Secondly
, I admire her when I was a child.Most of her songs
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I memorize by my heart because they are very good and thoughtful. My
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
song is Slow Down.
Finally
, I really love her beauty, she is not only beautiful on the outside but
also
beautiful on the heart
.
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For instance
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she is very charitable to help people who is less lucky and she is very respectful and loving her fans.
Furthermore
, she has a happy and comfortable life. I really admire and I want to be a person like Selena Gomez
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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