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Some people say that E book and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspapers and magazines. Do you agree or disagree?

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With the advent of technological equipments,
reading habits
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the reading habits
 of people today have been changed. Some of them deem that there will be the time once when technology will firmly replace conventional newspapers and magazines. I,
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however disagree
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however, disagree
 with
this
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 statement. In the forthcoming paragraphs I shall strengthen my viewpoint with my arguments. There are several reasons to support the view that they are irreplaceable. To commence with, they do not require any technical skills to read. A person can read the paper with a cup of tea in his hand, as it is in hard copy form.
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, magazine reading is more comfortable and convenient as compared to screen reading, because it has no myriad effect on
person's health
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a person's health
the person's health
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 as weakening of eyesight and obesity related issues.
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, they are safe to read. What is more, newspapers and magazines are made alluring for public and large population read the same news from one paper.
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, online information in E books is vast and unattractive to readers, where it is difficult to go through all the data, whereas only useful information is published in newspapers and magazines. To add to it, something which is written in papers remain as proof, while content in E books can be modified and erased and there is no proof for
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 information. To wrap up, it is irrefutable that due to advances in technology,
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a number
the number
 of people who read through papers has declined, but it will not be wise to say that technology will overpower them. They will remain invaluable in
future
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the future
 and use of them will continue.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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