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In the past, shopping was routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hoppy. Agree or disagree

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In the (contemporary) society, there have been widespread discussions about in the past, shopping was routine domestic task and various arguments have been put forward.. Indeed,
such
such
 debates have sometimes resulted in acrimonious or rancorous discussion.Whilst a large number of advocates may strenuously argue that many people nowadays regard it as a
hoppy
enjoying or showing or marked by joy or pleasure
happy
hobby
.Their adversaries may claim
otherwise
. Considering the numerous arguments made, I would (strongly; to some extent; in general) hold that there are both advantages and disadvantages, the most important of It is considered one of the most controversial issues today in
this
 essay I am going to examine
this
 phenomenon from both viewpoints. On one side of the argument there are people who argue that the benefit considerably outweigh the disadvantage for believing
this
 is many people when they go to shopping they feel very happy and now they consider shopping
hoppy
enjoying or showing or marked by joy or pleasure
happy
 in our life. Children,
for example
, they consider shopping
hoppy
enjoying or showing or marked by joy or pleasure
happy
 and they love going to shopping every
day
.
Moreover it
Accept comma addition
Moreover, it
 is
also
 possible to say that some people they go to shop every
day
 in order to buy their needs and
this
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
thus
 consider
hoppy
enjoying or showing or marked by joy or pleasure
happy
hope
happier
 for them. One good of illustrating
this
 is older people find them, they go shopping every
day
. On the hand. It is
also
 possible to consider it with the opposing case. It is often argued that in facts people who they consider shopping is
hoppy
enjoying or showing or marked by joy or pleasure
happy
happily
 always find them end month don’t have money because they go shopping every
day
. Often people have
this
 opinion because their belief is one. A
second
 point
that is
 people who they consider go to shopping
hoppy
enjoying or showing or marked by joy or pleasure
happy
hope
this
 person lost time. A particularly. Good example here is women go every
day
 of shopping and lost time. In summary, as discussed above, the advantages of shopping primarily include while the disadvantages are Shopping These are the main aspects people should consider carefully when dealing with these issues
in addition
 to other less important factors that may
also
 be stressed.
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