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The maps below show the development of the Paradise island for tourism purposed.

The maps below show the development of the Paradise island for tourism purposed.
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The maps illustrate the growth of
the
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apply
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Paradise Island for
travelling
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the travelling
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 industry in
period
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a period
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 of past and present.
Overall
, in the past, paradise island included some trees, a natural spring in the east and a scientific research station in the
west
.
Over development
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Overdevelopment
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 time, there are many changes,
such
 as trees
were
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being
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 cut down to construct a restaurant, and to the
west
Add a comma
,west
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 scientific research station is replaced by a swimming pool and hotel complex; but a natural spring and pier remain the same with
change
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changes
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 in size.
It is clear that
, in the present, across from
restaurant
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the restaurant
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 in the
west
 is a hotel complex near a swimming pool, and in the east is a BBQ area near
cycle
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the cycle
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 path. There is a scene in the northeast beside rocks, and a cafe
close
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closes
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a
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to a
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natural spring. Currently, a boat is replaced by
cruise
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a cruise
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 ship, and to the
west
 of
island
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the island
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 pier is reconstructed
with
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to
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bigger
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a bigger
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than
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apply
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size.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words west with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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