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Many people believe that the increasing number of cars in cities is the biggest source of pollution and waste. Others think that industries are the ones causing pollutioin. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often claimed that the pollutants from vehicles are the biggest source of
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 of the climate, while according to others industries are the crux of
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 environmental damage.
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 cars, undoubtedly, cause a detrimental effect on the urban environment, the catastrophe industrialism creates is a way bigger. Emission of harmful gases from cars, trucks, bikes and many others creates a dangerous situation in cities. The gases like sulphur, carbon and nitrogen are the main constituents in the depletion of the ozone layer. As an alternative to
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, scientists came up with an idea to run vehicles on sustainable sources of energy.
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, electric cars in the market are booming in sales compared to motor vehicles which on conventional fuel.
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,
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 in the environment is controlled and can be improvement in the air quality index is done.
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 to that, the government is promoting public transport services to citizens in order to curb
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deterioration
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the deterioration
 from cars. In stark contrast, development in the industrial sector has been advanced due to several reasons. As consumerism in the market is growing, industries of various varieties and categories of products are set up. People requires various choices in purchasing a particular product. Boost to industries, construction creates various types of
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 which eventually brings long-term consequences to the ecosystem. Amazon has set-up new
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 largest office in India as online consumerism is in great demand today which eventually create pollution in long-time. To summarise, both cars and industries are the culprit of the pollution in cities. But, pollution from industries are creating severe impact to habitat as various controls are not imposed on them.

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