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The graph shows the actual and predicted percentage change in employment in the UK, by education level.

The graph shows the actual and predicted percentage change in employment in the UK, by education level.
#percentage #change #employment #uk #education #level
The graph shows the actual and predicted percentage change in
employment
 in the UK, by education level since 1990 and predicts a trend till 2025. Two groups of students have noted the growth
of
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in
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employment
 level - those with master’s
degree
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degrees
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 and bachelor’s
degree
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degrees
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. First, Bachelor’s
degree
rate
 increased the most but in 2000 it has started fluctuating between 8% and 14% which is expected to continue in
next
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the next
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years
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few years
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. In the
beginning
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,beginning
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 the growth of
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the master’s
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master’s
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the master’s
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degree
rate
 was much slower
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than the
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the
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than the
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 bachelor’s,
although
 the situation changed in 2005, master’s
rate
 rapidly grew
then
 and since 2010 it is constantly increasing
this
 trend is estimated to keep up.
On the other hand
,
employment
 of students who graduated high school and those without school
certificate
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certificates
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 has been steadily dropping since 1990
nonetheless
 the drop
of
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in
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employment
of
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in
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 high school’s
rate
 stopped in 2020 and is expected to remain stable.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, degree, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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