The tables show the number of mobile phones sold in millions of for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makes comparisons where relevant.
The table describes that a
number
of mobile phones
were sold in millions between 2006 and 2012. There are divided into three groups; one is that the number
of mobile phones
sold by Nokia and Ericsson went up in about 2 years
before going down, and while
the quantity
of mobile Change the quantifier
number
phones
sold by Motorola tended to decrease significantly from 2006 to 2012, the two brands left had opposite
trend.
Beginning Add an article
an opposite
of
selling 345 and 74 Change preposition
apply
million
in 2006, and it was about 2 years
later that the figure increased to 475 and 102 million
respectively was the tendency of Nokia and Ericsson. However
, this
trend was
going down in Unnecessary verb
apply
years
left. Correct article usage
the years
Therefore
, in 2012, this
group had the lowest sold
mobile Add a hyphen
lowest-sold
phones
with 335 and 28 million
in the older given.
In 2006, a
Correct article usage
the
number
of mobile phones
sold by Motorola were 210 million
, and it is about 7 times as many as the number
in 2012. In contrast
, the quantity of mobile phone
sold by Samsum and iPhone had a tendency to increase quickly between 2006 and 2012. To be more specific, the figure Fix the agreement mistake
phones
of
Samsum and iPhone began from 117 and 0 Change preposition
for
million
to 396,5 and 135,8 million
in
turn. That meant the figure Change preposition
apply
of
Samsum and iPhone were nearly 3 times and 136 times as many as for a period of six Change preposition
for
years
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, phones, years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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