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One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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One of the things that most people are concerned about is the increase in life expectancy due to the quick improvement in medical
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 facilities. I agree that while
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 is seen as something advantageous by some people, in my opinion, far from being good, I believe it can lead to a real society’s problem.
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, one of the main problems resulting from long life expectancy is the lack of economic resources for everyone. Nowadays, thanks to the
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 facilities we have, a lot of people li
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lived
uch longer than years ago. In some developed countries, where the amount of medical resources and
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 facilities is higher, and within reach everyone who needs it, the person's expectancy life is of around 90 years, a very high number compared to the past, when people did not live much longer than 70 years.
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, if people live longer it means they need more medical
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 and
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, more money is needed in order to preserve their
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.
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, I think that there’s a moral and ethical problem as well. Despite a lot of old people is in a good
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 condition, there’s a part of them that has medical problems due to their old age. In these cases, it might suppose a major problem, not only for the patient, but
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 for his/her family, which has to take
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 and look after her/him. In conclusion, I think that despite
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 improvements and medical
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 are useful and necessary in a lot of people and different situations, the advantages from these can be sometimes overweight for the disadvantages.

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