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Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

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Lately, a plethora of topics are being seriously discussed among various individuals and groups, and one prominent one is that all experimentation on
animals
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 is bad and should be outlawed.
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, some people believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments.
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 it being justified
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 and the possible alternatives that can be done.
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 with, experimentation on
animals
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 can be justified by creating some boundaries on how it should be done,
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 as the amount of stuff that can be injected or the other living beings that can be used. It cannot be fully restricted, since the use of
animals
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 in science
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 led humans to various findings.
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, vaccines and other medical needs were made by first trying them
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 another living that shared the same DNA structure
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 humans. As for the possible alternative, the scientists could
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 collaborate with tech developers and create a specific model for them to try out chemicals on their own models.
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, the technology of AI
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can help to identify the possible reactions that may occur in real life.
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, AI could
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 predict the negative and positive outcomes of chemicals just by providing them with enough context to start with. In conclusion, experimentation on
animals
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 should have boundaries for it to be justified.
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, I
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 believe that with the help of technology, the test can
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 be done on a model rather than testing them on
animals
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 like rats or rabbits.

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task achievement
Ensure to address all parts of the task sufficiently. Including more specific examples and details in your argument makes your essay more persuasive and comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
Your essay demonstrates a good logical structure, with a clear introduction and conclusion. To improve, ensure all paragraphs are equally developed and each point is fully explained.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of linking words to improve the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs. This will also help in clearly signposting your argument, making your essay more cohesive.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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