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Some people prefer shopping in shopping centres while others prefer weekend markets. What are the advantages of each? Which shopping experience do you prefer?

#people #centres #weekend #markets
It is often said
Damnoen
Saduak
 Floating Market has a
lot
 of things to buy. One
such
 example is Sweet Mango Sticky Rice, Fresh Coconut, Pad Thai, Tom Yum Noodle With Pork, Sour Grapefruit and The best Khao Heang in Thailand.
Also
, we can buy Souvenir things
such
 as Floating Market shirt, Boxing gloves, Muay Thai pants,
colorful
having striking color
colourful
 fan, Fedora hat and Vintage toys. Beside, we can buy animals
such
 as tiny birds, young snakes, Fighting Fish, cute porcupine and matte black scorpion. One of the most striking features is that we can sell things at
Damnoen
Saduak
 Floating Market.
That is
 to say, we can sell foods
such
 as green mango, pure coconut, rose apple, Zongzi and Fruity Drink. Later, Secondhand things
such
 as Hawaii shirt, Old school slippers, fancy shades and signed
guitar
Suggestion
the guitar
guitars
.
Additionally
, we can buy accessories
such
 as Titanium chain,
rare
Suggestion
rarely
 watch, Tiger tooth necklace and Shining bracelet. It is well-know fact that we have a
lot
 reasons why we like to go to
Damnoen
saduak
Suggestion
Saduak
 Floating Market. One
instance could
Accept comma addition
instance, could
 be we can take a
lot
 of photos there
such
 as take a photo with
boa constrictor
Suggestion
a boa constrictor
boa constrictors
, porcupine, cute vendor and many beautiful points there. Apart
form
a giver or sender
from
this
,
Accept space
,
we can talk to a
lot
 of foreigners. Because
Damnoen
Saduak
 Floating Market is one of the best floating market in the world. That’s why
this
 place is known from foreigners. And you can practice your English by talking with a
foreigners
Suggestion
foreigner
such
 as tourist from Japan, China, Korea, Portugal, England, United States, Indonesia, France and others.
Finally
, we can learn a
lot
 of culture from that place. Because
Damnoen
Saduak
 Floating Market is just a few markets in Thailand that still be
a
Suggestion
an
 original floating market. You can learn a
lot
 of
culture
Accept comma addition
culture, such
such
 as how they live, how they sell their products, you can practice rowing and meet a
lot
 of nice people there.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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