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Libraries should focus on improving their technological resources rather than in building a larger collection of paper books. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #focus #resources #collection #paper #books
In the contemporary era, the level of the facilities in libraries
are
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is
also
 increasing day after day.
Instead
 of improving the collection of books. I partially agree with
this
 statement because number of arguments are surrounded in my
opinion which
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opinion, which
 will be critiqued by me in subsequent paragraphs. It is irrefutable that libraries play
crucial role
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a crucial role
 for those people who have
keen interest
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a keen interest
 in reading.
Labraries
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Libraries
 are providing technological amenities to facilitate the life of the people because in
this
 way, people can attain information from the access of the internet.
Moreover
, libraries consume either more space for keeping
papar
a material made of cellulose pulp derived mainly from wood or rags or certain grasses
paper
proper
 books or the cost of books are
also
 expensive. As these
thing
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things
is
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are
have been
 convenient for people to find any history without searching any book from
book shelf
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the book shelf
. In fact, they can obtain any book on sitting one place.
On the other hand
,
first
 of all, paper books helps to people to
concentration
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concentrate
 power and focus on the reading books. With the help of paper books, they are able to get knowledge for long period and sometimes people have eyesight problem so they feel
difficulty
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difficult
 to read anything from their smartphones. What is more, when people saw library shelf's are filled with distinct books and topics that time they may get inspiration as well as enhance their
interest
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interests
for
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in
 reading differ books which improve their reading skill, vocabulary
,
Accept space
,
_________, imagination power.
Last
 but not least, e-books are easily lost and sometimes delete by mistake in that case, paper books are always lucrative for the learners. The conclusion to be drawn is that even technological gadgets create more convenience and accessibility for people.
Nevertheless
, Paper books, from my perspective,
is
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are
 essential as well.
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