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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation?

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Nowadays , Doctors and teachers are immigrating from developing
countries
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 to rich
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. In
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 essay, I will discuss the cause of
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 problem by taking examples from newspapers and journals.
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 with , No doubt that each person wants growth in their career whether it is in terms of money or upgrading their skills . Professional
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 are leaving their home
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 for many reasons
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 as financial growth and to enhance skills .
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 , If all professionals keep shifting from their own poor
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then
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 there will be a scarcity of professional
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 and
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 ,
this
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 condition will impact the economy of the
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 .
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 , a recent survey from the New York Times revealed that 80% of professional
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 who shifting from an undeveloped
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 to Japan are extremely happy in
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 developed
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 because of the high salaries and other facilities
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 as free education for their kids , annual bonus , and travelling allowance etc. because of all these facilities there lives is joyful .
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 , the Government should take some major action on the immigration of professionals by providing them with some facilities in their home
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.
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, the Government should appreciate and reward those
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 who are serving the nation.
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 , Sudan is not a developed
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 even though educated
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 from Sudan are not willing to relocate from their home
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 because they are happy with their authority policies.
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, Poor
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' Government should encourage their professional
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 not to shift to another
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 by giving them the expected lifestyle and it will be useful for the
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's growth as well.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Skilled professionals
  • Healthcare systems
  • Education systems
  • Economic growth
  • Dependency on foreign aid
  • Social inequality
  • Quality healthcare
  • Quality education
  • Retain talent
  • International cooperation
  • Sustainable growth
  • Scholarships
  • Professional development
  • Remote work capabilities
  • Local research funding
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