Some people say that the main environmental problem is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Planet earth or

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to say our home is now dealing with problems that mankind has caused. And many facts relate to environmental problems directly or indirectly. But the most severe consequences of our worsening environment are endangered

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and plants. Surely, other reasons can be arguable

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as water pollution, deforestation, desertification and many more. While I cannot deny that the impact of natural disasters

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are important, but I am certain that the extinction of

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and plants would be catastrophic among the others for the planet earth.

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why are we facing with endangering the

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, while we- humans are establishing a more comfortable and easier life for ourselves,

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we are damaging the environment by cutting mass trees, killing animals and polluting seas.

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, large food companies still use ground nets for catching many more fish,

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method banned because it causes massive damage to undersea life. And as a consequence of being a consumption society, people are getting more selfish about their needs and pleasures no matter what cost. Giving an example, in China, there is rising a food fashion which calls "shark fin soup". Cutting the fins of sharks to make a soup and let them into the sea or ocean without their fins

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means that leave them to death just for a glimpse of pleasure. It is clear that our selfish behaviour against the planet impact detrimental consequences.

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, destructive storms, remarkable fluctuations in climate, melting of the glaciers are causing a significant effect on the environment.

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, the real fact behind these events is related to endangered species and plants. A good illustration of

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is the rain forests of Amazon. As lungs of the world, Amazon forests are now facing the danger of extinction by large and global food companies. Cutting the massive amount of trees

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also disturb

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also disturbs

is also disturbing

the species that live in the forests.

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, reducing the trees across the world

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impacts negatively on the balance of the air. In conclusion, there is no doubt that disturbing the

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and plants would be catastrophic consequences for mankind. As human beings, we connect the whole living creatures that are living on

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planet and we have to learn how to respect them and live together with.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Some people say that the main environmental problem is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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