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Politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#politicians’ #lives #newspapers
Some would argue that the personal
life
 of the politicians must not be discussed in the print media. I completely agree with
this
 notion because
this
 action may endanger their credibility among the people and
also
 influences their performance due to the stress caused by putting an extra effort to conceal discrepancies in their personal
life
. The most imperative reason why the newspapers should not be allowed to talk about the personal
life
 of the political figures is that they may lose credibility among their followers. As an effect, they will lose popularity and the number of their valuable voters will drop. In
this
 way, even the competent politician will not be elected as his personal matters
is brought
Suggestion
are brought
bring
 into their professional
life
.
For example
, the competent Ex-Mayor of one of the metropolitan cities of Pakistan
significantly lose
Suggestion
significantly loses
 his number of voters in
2018 election
Suggestion
the 2018 election
 as people were doubtful about his character when he divorced his
second
 wife. The
second
 plausible cause of not to publish about the personal
life
 of
politician
Suggestion
a politician
politicians
 is that even an outstanding politician will strive to hide the existing weakness in their personal
life
.
Consequently
, he could not perform well in his assigned tasks due to immense mental stress.
Therefore
, he would not be in
position
Suggestion
a position
the position
 to present his people in a better way at different international and nation platforms. Eventually, the people of that region will suffer and their voice would not be presented well.
For example
, the President of Sudan could not present his people’s voice at the United Nation platform as his performance was severely influenced by putting significant effort to manage his professional duties and concealing his extra-marital affairs. In conclusion, the politicians’ personal
life
 should not be the part of print media as it will not only negatively affect their integrity but will
also
 be perilous to their professional outcomes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intrusion
  • accountability
  • transparency
  • sensationalism
  • privacy
  • public interest
  • collateral damage
  • precedent
  • responsible journalism
  • exploitation
  • democratic processes
  • media culture
  • balance
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