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In today s times the internet is making it easy to study online from home. Some prefer online courses to study and think it is better. Others prefer classroom education. Discuss both views and share your opinion.

Nowadays, studying from home is becoming more accessible because of the internet.
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 some
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 are happy because of
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 innovative way of learning, others prefer the traditional one.
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 essay will analyze both views in more detail.
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 with, some
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 think that online courses are better than the classic ones. They might consider
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because of
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 several reasons;
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, online courses offer the opportunity to study anywhere in the world without
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 to travel for
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, they save a great amount of time and
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, but not least, they offer a significant economy of money.
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, a student from Europe who will
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 in an online course in America will not have to travel and stay abroad so
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 will reduce the financial costs, and will
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 save time. To put it short, studying online has certain benefits that make it the
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 method of learning for some
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On the other hand
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, others prefer the classroom education. For these
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,
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human contact is extremely important so, they prefer to sacrifice time and money in order to interact with
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, the personal style of a teacher cannot be replaced by a virtual class and
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 cannot be properly transmitted without
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 interaction.
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, in the case of a musical instrument class, the technical details of playing the instrument and the emotions behind it are very important and they require a direct interaction. So, there are situations when the traditional methods are far better than the online ones. In conclusion, the internet is of
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great help for learning from home today. In my opinion, it is a valuable asset as a complementary option for learning, but it cannot totally replace the teachers and the classrooms. In education,
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 need to interact with
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 mentors, because teaching is more than information, and
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machines cannot teach the refined details of
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 of information.

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Your introduction clearly presents the topic and outlines what the essay will discuss, which is good. However, you could improve the clarity by rephrasing some sentences to make them even simpler.
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You have presented both views well, but include more clear examples to strengthen your arguments. More specific examples in each paragraph would help readers understand your points better.
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Make sure your conclusion summarizes your main points clearly and strongly. This can reinforce your overall opinion and give a solid ending to your essay.
strength
The structure of your essay is clear with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. This makes it easy to follow.
strength
You included relevant points for both online and classroom education, showing a balanced view. This is a positive aspect.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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