In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

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Nowadays there is a huge amount of offences which are happening all over the world,
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as arsons, burglaries, frauds, vandalism, kidnapping and so on. In
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essay, I am going to consider the reasons And how we can decide them to stop cruelty on our planet.
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of all, I believe that committing crimes depends on the social situation in each country, their development and income of citizens. Namely because of not enough money person can go on different crimes just because he wants to exist, to eat.
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, there are lots of white-collar crimes
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as hacking and blackmailing due to big globalization in different companies, where everyone wants to get databases from each of them. So, for
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reason, companies spend a big part of their income to prevent
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situations and to save their business.
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, there are lot's of kidnapping,
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the problem grows up every day, there are many reasons why a person is ready to do it. In most cases, it can be met when people are divorced, so one parent wants to abducting the child from another parent. In those cases to prevent
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situations, the decisions of these problems should be gone out from government restrictions and politics.
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, the government should control all spheres of people's lives. They need to pass different laws to stop doing
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things and to increase imposing fines on the citizens,
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even to increase imprisonment time. What is more, for some crimes may be returning to capital punishments.
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, there should be community services for some petty crimes too,
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as traffic offences. In the result, after committing the crime person must fully understand his mistake and try not to repeat it. To my mind, if there were more punishments, people would think before doing something prohibited.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic disparity
  • propensity
  • recidivism
  • deterrent
  • rehabilitative
  • judicial system
  • corruption
  • socioeconomic
  • alienation
  • stigmatization
  • decriminalization
  • enforcement
  • gentrification
  • preemptive measures
  • intervention strategies
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