Some people believe that once a person becomes a criminal, he will always be a criminal. Do you agree with this statement? Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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When the
prisoners
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have fulfilled their
conviction
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convictions
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, the government will let them
freed
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.
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, many inhabitants said that
although
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prisoners
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have been freed, they will still have a chance to commit some
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criminals
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crimes
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.
This
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essay firmly does not agree with
this
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notion and will state the reasons.
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with, the primary reason why ex-
prisoners
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will not commit any violence is that their heart is full of the feel of
regretful
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.
According to
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some research, missing their family is the most significant pressure for the
prisoners
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. Because some of them probably think that their families will not receive them again.
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, the
prisoners
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will not want to taste the
ambiance
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of prison again because their surroundings are full of
criminals
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.
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,
come
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back to
penitentiary
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the penitentiary
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is the worst thing for the
criminals
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.
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, a decision from the government cannot be in vain
by
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the
criminals
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. People who have been in the cell for the second time will get a more stringent punishment
rather
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than formerly.
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, they will not commit any
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criminals
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crimes
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again and start to think about some jobs that are sufficient for them. For smart
prisoners
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, they will utilize their time in jail to plan what they want to do when they are free.
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, it is not impossible for a prisoner to become a rich man with a good job. In conclusion,
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there are some ex-
prisoners
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still
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who still
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do bratty things, the chance for the
criminals
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to change is more leading because they do not want to humiliate their family and
got
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get
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a lengthy penitential time again.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rehabilitation
  • reintegration
  • recidivism
  • therapy
  • stigmatization
  • reoffending
  • accountability
  • support programs
  • proactive steps
  • personal choice
  • societal barriers
  • reform
  • transformation
  • opportunities
  • environment
  • social support
  • success stories
  • examples
  • criminal behavior
  • stereotype
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