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Some people think that they can make as much noise as they want, while others think that the amount of noise people make should be strictly controlled. Discuss both views and include your own opinion and examples.

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It is unfortunately the case that in any society we can find a number of people who do not respect to the social rights of others. One of the most disturbing cases is making
noise
 either in public or people's private
life
. While the majority of people believe that the amount of
noise
 produced by individuals must be restricted, there are still people who think that they have freedom to make
noise
 regardless of considering other's
life
. In
this
 essay, I will explain my point of view by examining both sides of the argument. Some people think that they should not take any responsibility related to limiting or decreasing the
noise
 made by them. They claim that controlling the amount of the
noise
 by rules and regulations not only invades their personal privacy, but it violates their social freedom.
For example
, in their view, listening to music loudly or hosting night parties in their own apartments would be considered as their basic human rights of being happy. There is,
however
, a strong argument that it is the responsibility of all members of a society to respect others' social
life
. Most people object to disrupting other's
life
 by making unlimited noises. They believe that making
noise
 should be controlled as much as possible when it creates
disturbance
Suggestion
a disturbance
 for others by regulating strict rules. A common example here is to prohibit talking over cell phones loudly in the public
such
 as in a subway which is clearly creating
disturbance
Suggestion
a disturbance
 for people who are near the person while it has been frequently happening. In my view, any type of activity that creates disturbance for citizens'
life
 must be controlled, and
noise
 is no exception.
Although
 it is beyond the power of governments to control all disturbing noises in the whole society, it seems to be possible that making some avoidable noises is banned in certain places
such
 as near hospitals.
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