Some people do not go directly to college but travel or work for a short time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Taking a gap year to travel or work after graduating high schools has gained increasing popularity recently. Despite drawbacks

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phenomenon brings to us, its values are more significant. Students can be faced with some problems when they make a decision on a gap year. The

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disadvantage is that it is time-consuming. The reason is that while they are on their journey, others attend to universities, which equips them necessary knowledge and skills with a view to joining in workforce immediately after graduating. Other than that, seeking employment after finishing programs in high schools can make their career paths limited.

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is because some jobs, particularly white-collar jobs or ones with an attractive pay package, usually require academic degrees, which means that students can be only low-income earners if they follow

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trend.

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, people can reap great benefits from the gap year.

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of all, it relieves their financial burdens. The school fees in institutions are not affordable for some students;

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, a job may offer them financial support if they desire to pursue tertiary education later on.

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, trips and work provide students with hands-on experience which not only helps them to deal with academic works, including dissertations and assignments when they decide to attend to universities but

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is one of indispensable requirements almost every recruiter seeks. Ultimately,

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issue accelerates the well-rounded development of students' technical competence. When they make trips or enter the workforce, they have a lot of opportunities to meet like-minded people and dealing with tons of problems and different kinds of people is inevitable, which both expands their social circle and enhances their the ability to improvise and communication skills. All in all,

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travelling or engaging in workforce may be the waste of time, its invaluable salutary lessons play a vital role in individuals' lives.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

308 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

gap year
self-discovery
character-building
enhanced
independence
adaptability
interpersonal skills
open-mindedness
global perspective
delayed
employment prospects
financial burden
educational attainment

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Some people do not go directly to college but travel or work for a short time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Include an introduction and conclusion

The best way to solve the traffic and transportation problem is to encourage people to live in cities rather than suburbs and countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Nowadays university education is very expensive. Some people say that universities should reduce their fees, especially for the less fortunate stuvery spedents or those coming from rural areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The flowchart illustrates the production of coloured plastic paper clips in a small factory