Both government and individuals are spending a large amount of money for protecting animals and their habitat. This money should be better spent dealing with fundamental issues in society such as poverty and health care. To what extent do you agree?

There is no doubt that, animals are illegally being hunted for food and decorative purposes in many parts of the world, and to protect them from hunters, governments spend huge sums of money. Even though I largely agree that governments should prioritise
this
money to solve the issues of humans,
such
as
poverty
and
health
care
, I believe that the state has the responsibility to protect animal
species
to a certain extent. Admittedly, the primary responsibility of every government is to fulfil the fundamental rights of its citizens
such
as food, cloth,
health
care
. There are many people in our country who are deprived of food and unable to access quality
health
care
.
Furthermore
, Unfortunately,
poverty
and
health
care
are closely interconnected.
This
is because, when a member of a destitute family will become gets injured or ill, the entire household will ultimately end up with low income and high
health
care
costs.
For instance
, the WHO’s World
Health
Organisation’s statistics in the
last
year showed that the infant mortality rate and nutritional deficiency disease were higher in low income families than in affluent ones.
That is
why, many people favour that the government should allocate its budget to give preference to mitigate the social evils
such
as
poverty
and famine rather than protection of animals.
In addition
to alleviating these social issues, I believe that governments have the responsibility to protect its flora and fauna along with their natural habitat. To elaborate, we are unaware that a vast number of animal and plant
species
are dwindling in number due to poaching and human encroachment (be specific and leave no vagueness) other reasons.
Consequently
, they are on the verge of extinction, and
thus
leading (are THEY leading to loss of biodiversity. Use a word that refers to “the verge of extinction”)
this
leads to loss of biodiversity which is essential for healthy and functional ecosystem.
Moreover
, these plant and animal
species
are vitally important to prevent epidemics and to protect the public from diseases.
For example
, a lot of vaccines are derived from the chemicals produced by animals.
Therefore
, wildlife conservation programmes and management of financial resource for animal protections
also
need attention. In conclusion, it is believed by some that animal protection campaigns and programmes are given wide preferences by authorities. Despite I widely strongly believe that a government should bestow more importance to the
health
and
poverty
of its citizens,
however
, governments practices to protect the endangered
species
should not be underrated.

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