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When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and way of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

#country #technology #skills #life
We are living in the 21st century and
technology
 is everywhere, in every aspect of
life
. Human cannot live without advance and new
technology
 that reduce human work and efforts. But it
also
 brings changes in living standard; Culture and traditional way of doing things overtaking by modern machinery.
This
 essay will examine both of the views and provide a conclusive summary. In my opinion, I disagree with the above statement that by following traditional skills along with modern
life
 style is pointless. Because Culture has its own value and
technology
 has its own advantages.
Firstly
, culture is all about our norms, values and Morales that give a shape to society; how to live a happy
life
 whereas automation helps to make that
life
 easy not happy.
Secondly
, Old traditions are being transferred to one generation to another, so that knowledge and capabilities shall be available among humans.
For instance
, China is the only nation who follows its culture with rigidity. Chinese are the part of one of the developed nations and technologically advanced but still they didn't let die their customs and values. The art of Kungfu fighting is still being taught by the masters to the new breed. They still use Chinese as their business language, whereas whole world use English as a business language. To conclude, it can be said that being technologically advanced does not mean that old culture is useless for the coming generation.
However
, Culture provides a direction to humans to use
technology
 in
such
 a way so that nature and human
life
 may sustain on Earth forever.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancement
  • Efficiency
  • Global connectivity
  • Cultural identity
  • Diversity
  • Innovation
  • Coexist
  • Sustainable
  • Eco-friendly
  • Energy-intensive
  • Practical skills
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Homogenize
  • Preservation
  • Global diversity
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