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One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Technological advancement and many researches in science has very positive impacts on human
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. It has not only improved standard of
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the life expectancy
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 of the population. Science has improved in all fields like constructions, educations, astrology, zoology and
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 in the medical field. Advanced in medicine and medical equipments, technology has more benefits than demerits of
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. In my opine,
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 span would have more positive impact in nations rather than negative. In the opinion of many people
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 will increases in ratio of old population and shrink in young work force. If the proportion of senior people increased than the Government have to support them
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, it will
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 the burden on the Government.
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, the more old population more
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 in number of experienced persons.
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, it took so many years to become a specialist surgeon, because it needs so many studies and practice in their relevant field. If
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 raises up,
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 chances of these skills doctors to live more will be high. In fact,
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 applies to all professional fields. Another observation, now a day
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 is becoming very struggling and hard, Both parents have to do work to fulfil requirements of their family and their family members. Working parents have to go to their jobs, So there is a problem of taking care of their babies in their absence, the grandparents are better options to look after of their grandchildren. These are the only family members which are more concern about their grand offsprings. The
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 problem of many parents, but grandchildren can learn so many things, traditions and customs about their culture. To conclude, I would thanks to medical science, so many inventions of medicines, in treatments of disease in order improve
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life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
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 and save our grandparents. So more
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expectancy
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 has more advantages rather
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