Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, others think that zoos are useful to protect rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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recent years, the mistreatment of animals in zoos has been increasing, causing some public controversy that whether zoos should be banned.
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it would be argued by some those zoos are beneficial to conserve endangered species, plenty of evidence suggests the opposite is true. On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why some think that zoos are good for animals.
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, by bringing visitors and animals together, zoos educate the public and foster an appreciation of the other species.
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means that the public’s love for animals continues to grow, the number of people getting involved in animal welfare will continue to increase.
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, through breeding species at risk of extinction in the wild, zoos save and enhance the population of the endangered animals.
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, since China's Zoos have breeding programs for China giant pandas by artificial insemination, they are no longer endangered.
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, I would argue that It would be better for animals when shutting down the zoos.
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, it is clear that numerous zoos in the world have been abusing animals by not feeding them and making them do countless tricks. Banning zoological gardens may help them prevent from hurt.
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, since zoos have linked to numerous incidents of diseases including E.
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usually do not care about them when they are sick. In conclusion, some people think zoos bring more benefits for animals, I personally believe that zoos are harmful to animals and they should be banned.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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