In the past children were taught how to save money, but today they only learn how to spend it. Do you agree?

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With expansion in the disposable income of people, they ought to spend more. Albeit, some people believe that in retrospect kids used to learn to save money,

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, now they are more towards spending it. I strongly agree with

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view in detail and will draw an inference. Where in retrospect, the value of cash was paramount because the purchasing power of the people was not that high as today,

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, their offspring used to learn the concept of savings right from the beginning.

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, earlier families were comparatively bigger in sizes,

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, the number of siblings was more, so they were always told to share and reuse things, rather than spending out without a reason.

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, my father has five siblings, and he always mentions that, they used to share their toys and clothes among each other,

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, they have been taught by my grandparents to save even a single penny, so that they can use it effectively in the future. Having said that, the value of saving was vital in the past. On the flip side, globalization has increased the net disposable worth of the society, and the spending among families has really elevated.

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, people work hard to maintain their standards, and it has been observed that, they tend to offer more cash for their kids,

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of spending time with them. Now, who will tell them to save money?

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, with multifarious fads available in the market, adolescents and teenagers get attracted to spend more to follow the trends and stay in the league of their peers, yet, no one even thinks to preserve any fund for the future, because the fund inflow is recurring to the children in the modern society. To illustrate, a study by Oxford university states that, in developed countries, kids' spending has increased to 70% since 2010.

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, they are more inclined towards dispersing the wealth rather than saving it at any point of time. To recapitulate, having mulled over above information and deliberating all the facts, it can be deducted that, fund saving concept in offspring has considerably deteriorated since past. I agree that the children earlier were much more educated about the importance of their wealth. At present, the perception is that, if they buy the latest toys and gadgets

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they are in the vogue. Saving as a concept has diminished in its value.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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In the past children were taught how to save money, but today they only learn how to spend it. Do you agree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Children find it difficult to pay attention or concentrate on school study what are the reasons? How can we solve this problem?

some people believe that a gap year between school and university is a good idea while others disagree strongly with. Consider both sides of this debates and present your own idea. You should give reasons for your answer and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience

Many people these days change career throughout their working life. What are the main reasons for it? Is it a positive or negative development for them personally and for the society as a whole?

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