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The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart compares the yearly
number
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 of
visitors
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in
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 3 different museums from 2007 to 2012.
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, the peak of
visitors
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'
number
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 was in 2012,
while
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 the lowest point was in 2009 and 2010. Victoria and Albert
Museum
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 was the most popular from 2007 to 2009. During 2007-2008 its annual
number
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 of
visitors
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 remained constant at about 14
million
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 people per year.
However
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, the figure started to decline rapidly in 2009, and reached its lowest point of about 8
millions
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 in 2010, becoming the least popular
museum
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 for the rest of the period. After that, the
number
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 of Victoria and Albert
Museum
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's
visitors
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 gradually rose
up
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to 10
million
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visitors
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 within 2 years. British
Museum
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 was the
second
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 most popular in 2007, being outraced by Victoria and Albert
Museum
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.
Nevertheless
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, its
number
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 of
visitors
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 experienced a sharp fall in 2008 and remained unchanged the following year.
Then
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, the figure started to increase. It reached its peak of approximately 14
million
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visitors
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 in 2012, regaining its position of 2007. National Gallery
Museum
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 showed the most notable development with
a
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steady growth throughout the period. Being the least popular
museum
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 in the beginning, it experienced a growth of more than 10
million
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visitors
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 over
6-year
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a 6-year
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 period
,
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 and became the
most visited
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most-visited
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museum
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 in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, museum, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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