Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is a common belief that the people who commit a crime should not sentence a fine, they should work for the community. I will briefly explain

this

situation, supporting by rehabilitation of the prisoners.

To begin

, many people think about the judges should comment to the guilty make amends to

society

Thus

, they should work unpaid like as a volunteer

such

as in a municipality or the government places.

For example

, local authorities try to hire the prisoners in order are forgiven by the communities in my city. They are employers in the city,

however they

Accept comma addition

however, they

can not give the money to them.

Therefore

, they encourage to enable to prevail like others, not only money,

also

old proud and response. Due to the fact that, when their fine will end up, they will be free.

This

project has started at 2015, and many of criminals product hard ever had. I firmly agree every person deserves another change, even if a thief or a murder.

On the other hand

, another belief says that if the prisoners do not sentence a fairly fine, the

society

structure will be broken by them.

In addition

to them, other people who tend to crime, can not give up their worse plan.

However

, it should be changed by believing them. To join the

society

without judging, everybody escapes from crime, even

also

bad-tempered behaviour.

For example

, a geology teacher put in the prison the reason of being an imposter in

last

two years, but the judge gave him a job which teaching his course in there. He stays in the same place, but he released the truth day by day. He is becoming more tolerant, kind, indulgent before he had never been.

That is

to say,

second

change to the people can heal their bad side, they can return to innocence. Maybe, the worst thing is in the world is forgiving. In conclusion, I restate that it is a better way to hire the criminal than staying in the jail. To make amends to the

society

, they can easily adapt to the unpaid jobs.

Also

, they fell be motivated by acceptance of the other people. Over their jail days, they can continue good habits and volunteering.

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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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371 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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Personal experiences in community service and/or involvement

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