Nowadays modern gadgets are widely used by young people and the use of these products reduces their creativity. Do you agree or disagree?

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world war, the urge for the economy to stabilise was required for development to take place. The key to the economic growth that came in the upcoming years was technology. Technology as we know it today helps us out in all sectors of our life with gadgets and other applications. But do these reduce our creativity?

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my opinion both have a lot to offer. On the one hand, before these advancements were brought into our life, people would spend their free

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on activities that

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, they would read books, paint or play sports, exercising their mind and body and of course

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them in an inventive way. To illustrate, a study monitored by the university of Cambridge showed that

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with people in the early 20th century, our percentage of teenagers playing sports

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, the opportunities that these have to

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are unlimited, if we have the will to discover them.

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, there are thousands of apps that give you the chance to draw, edit pictures and videos and millions of free online books for you to read.

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, these are easy to locate online, teens always find a way to avoid them and spend all their

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on social networking sites, doing nothing else than just chatting or roaming their friend’s pictures.

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, the Greek government surveyed and found out that more that 90% of teenagers use social networking sites for more that 3 hours a day. In conclusion, there are multiple ways for someone to find his creative strings. But gadgets give an easy getaway for youngsters to waste their free

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that could

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be spent creatively. But in my opinion, parents must be informed about the consequences of the lack of artistic content and try to introduce new ways for their children to spend their free

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 4.5

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322 words

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Nowadays modern gadgets are widely used by young people and the use of these products reduces their creativity. Do you agree or disagree?

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