Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals: during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people argue that we no longer remember the original meaning of festivals, and these people treat them as opportunities to have fun. While I agree that enjoyment seems to be the priority during these festival periods. I do not agree that people have forgotten what these festivals mean. On the one hand, traditional or religious festivals have certainly become times for celebrations. In the UK, Christmas is a good example of these festival periods when people most concerned with shopping, giving and receiving presents, decorating their homes, and enjoying traditional meals with their families.
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, most people look forward to Christmas as a holiday period, rather than a time to practise religion. We can see the same behaviour in non-religious festivals,
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as Bonfire Nights. People more likely associate
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occasion by making fires, watching firework display, and attending events in their local parks.
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, enjoyment seems to be everyone's a primary goal during these festival times.
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, I disagree that people have forgotten the underlying meaning of these festivals. In the UK primary school, children tend to learn in detail about the reasons for celebrating Christmas, Easter and a variety of festivals in other religions.
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, in late December, children sing Christmas songs which have a religious content, and they
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perform various nativity play on Jesus's birth.
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play a vital role in passing knowledge of religion's greater significance on to the
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generations. It is true same for traditional religions
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as Bonfire Nights and Halloween, where people usually learn about these festivals at an early age. In conclusion,
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people, mainly consider festivals as a time to enjoy themselves, I believe that they still aware why we celebrate these festivals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Commercialization
  • Globalization
  • Cultural dilution
  • Traditional values
  • Secularization
  • Festivity
  • Heritage
  • Individualism vs. collectivism
  • Consumer culture
  • Intangible cultural heritage
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