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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or dis agree.

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Universities should accept equal numbers
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 male and female pupils in any subject
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, a couple of reasons in agreement and disagreement will be explored in
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 essay. Conspicuously, accepting male and female pupils in equal quantities is not a rational choice because they can be an adverse distraction for one another.
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, since 1991 IRAN universities separated male and female in two varied faculties and they have had a fabulous
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 science experts believe that the less distraction pupils have in their universities, the more precious
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, it is assumed that each university should accept solely males or females and not both of them equally. Indisputably, men and women should have equal right to be accepted in any university and class, because discrimination is not acceptable in societies.Experts asserted that turning a blind eye to a specific gender will have
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, it is about time universities let pupils assert their capabilities either male or female with equal numbers.
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 and they should pursue their education in universities the same as men
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in IRAN the number of women are far more than men and universities initiated to accept one million female and Male pupils annually since 2018.It is argued that if only Iranian universities were aware of
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, pupils would rather have equal educational amenities for men and women in their university. In summary, universities should accept
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