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Some people believe that success comes from hard work. Others think that it has to do with luck. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Give details and examples to support your opinion.

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Does
success
 only come from hard
work
 or is
luck
 the basis of everything? Nowadays some people believe that
success
 comes from hard
work
. Others think that it has to do with
luck
. I think that
luck
 can make the life ea
sier but
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easier, but
work
 hard is fundamental to get what you want. In
this
 essay i
w
refers to the speaker or writer
I
ill an
alyze b
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
oth viewpoints and th
an g
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
ive my opinion on the topic. It is said that to have
success
 you should
work
 hard. A good preparation is the only thing that we can do to get something from life and If you just wait for
luck
 to arrive you will never achieve your goals.There are lo
t o
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lots
f famous soccer players and other athletes that were born in poor countries and committed themselves to achieving their goals without concessions, another ex
ample are s
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example, are
tudents who to
get g
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get
ood grades so a good job like en
trepreneur,
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an entrepreneur
director
work
 hard. In my opinion is better to do
not t
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do, not
rust
luck
 because if it changes you would be deceived and it is
therefore
 better to fight with your own strength.
On the other hand
luck
 can always help, many times
success
 is
also
 attributed to
luck
, fate still plays an important role in determining
success
, but only with it could it be short-lived. Many people are known and successful only for being relatives of other famous family members and if you have important knowledge, economic possibilities and people who support you, your career will be easier to achieve but not everyone is able to keep their profile a
success
. An example in the world of
work
 is that if you get what you want,as an important role in a society, thanks to
luck
 you will not be able to continue, because there will be no
luck
 sooner or later

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