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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility to university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university
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Education is pioneer of student fortune. But some suitable & adequate students could not access to the universities. Some argue that wealthy and indigent both go through trouble in getting
admission
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 to the varsities. In my opinion, children from affluent families easily get
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 into institutes.
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, it is quite difficult for poor.
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 with, rich students have many chances to take a seat for higher study in institutions. In private organizations, they have reserved seats for wealthy families, students, that pays an enormous fee.
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, if their child could not get higher grades, they provide donation and if institute don’t initiate for
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 to their child, they have many notorious contacts to get access to the varsity.
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, even if the students do not get excel in academics they have influential contacts of trustees and recommendation of politicians might be
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a material effigy that is worshipped
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 to them. In fact, with
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 privilege, their children can get
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 effortless.
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, youngster with non-affluent family background or no top influences might be hard to accessibility. Poor students could get scholarships, but for limited students only. It’s an arduous way for poor to deal with these conditions. According to Hindustan Unilever movement named “Shiksha”
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30% of Indian intellectuals, students could not get access to the universities due to circumstances related to money.
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, it is easier to accessibility into educational organizations for magnate families’ children, it’s difficult for indigent children. No matter what, education is everywhere, if you could not get
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 in institutes, does not mean that your future will be blurry. Try to find your own ways to get information.

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