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WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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There is a fact that jobs taken by people have different salary ranges due to factors
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 and energy commitment, and requirement. People are discussing whether it is reasonable that people who
work
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 in sports industry deserve higher salary payment than those who take positions in other important fields. From my perspective, I believe that it is unfair that sports professionals earn more money than other professions. Some people argue that it is fair for sports professionals to receive more income since they more difficult jobs compared with others.
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sports professions
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sports, professions
 require more
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 and energy while others do not.
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sports education
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sports, education
 instructors are required to receive long-hour training quarterly.
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, they are stressful because they have to complete difficult professional
training tests
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training, tests
that make
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that, make
 sure they maintain high-qualified.
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, it is reasonable for some people to comment that workers in sports sectors are supposed to receive better
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 payment. It is
thought
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 by people that it is unreasonable that jobs associated with sports should earn more money. There are some jobs
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 indispensable for people to spend plenty of
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 on them.
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, it is a prerequisite to receive
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a certain amount
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, sometimes it is hard for people to achieve life balance due to overload projects
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, project design and necessary meetings.
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, due to similarities of these jobs to sports professionals, it is unjustified that
sports professions
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sports, professions
 are more rewarding than other important jobs that need outstanding
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 and labour. In conclusion, by combining both views concerning if it is fair to provide sports professionals more rewards than people who are serving in other essential positions, I think if sports professionals are offered more salary, it will be unfair for those who
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 in other important and difficult jobs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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