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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

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Have you ever thought that incoming products from foreign countries is good for our economic growth or not? In my point of view, we should import things that we cannot produce by ourselves to satisfy people wants and needs. Nowadays, people trade things with
money
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 to get what they wants and needs to make them more comfortable and fulfil their heart with things that they love. So, people start to learn how to sell products and strategies to gain more profit as much as they can
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 the
country
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. The
government
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 needs to increase the percentages of gross domestic
product
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 (GDP) to make the business in the
country
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 run well and get enough
money
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 to pay an expenditure for the whole
country
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. Supermarkets are the most centre that might help
government
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 to gain more
money
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 by include taxes to products that they sell because people spend their
money
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 for food or even the asset which is essential for their lives.
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, if we import products that customer wants and needs, but we cannot produce by ourselves, the taxes of incoming
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 with a higher rate will make
government
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 has more income.
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, people will spend their
money
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 for things they want especially for limited products and brand name, what will come after is revolving funds in the
country
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 and has a very strong economy.
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, fans of Gucci really want to update their accessaries and buy the limited one.
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, it might be a bit disadvantages
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 as, when people spend too much on imports products and ignore or did not support our own
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 enough so they will lose their income but, if we promote and people cooperate, we can solve
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 problem. To conclude, import
product
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 will increase peoples' incomes and beneficial to the
government
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 to earn more taxes. In my opinion, I think imports are more helpful to our economy than disadvantages and
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 why I agree with
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