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the graph describes the changes in medical funding in four countries from 2010 to 2018.

the graph describes the changes in medical funding in four countries from 2010 to 2018.
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The bar graph depicts the alteration of the medical budget in four different countries, namely A, B, C and D. The analysis was collected between 2010, 2014 and 2018.
To begin
 with, it is significantly observed that all countries showed a similar trend in terms of altered funds throughout the survey period.
Firstly
, it was remarkable that the highest fund was allocated in 2010 with 32 million dollars. The medical
funds
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 allocation showed a downward trend after eight years. In 2014, it slightly fell to 10% lesser
of
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 the amount in 2010.
Lastly
, in 2018, it was recorded the lowest money spent
in
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 medical facilities at about 24 million dollars. Based on the information given,
it is clear that
 2010 had the largest proportion of medical funds in all mentioned countries.
On the other hand
, 2018 depicted the least. The funding varied in a span of eight years with moderate changes.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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