Some people think that Modern Technology is making people more sensible, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both points and give your opinion

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Many people has

perception

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the perception

that advancement in

technology making

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technology, making

them more connected with others, while some have opposite views.I think in

contemporary era

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the contemporary era

, technology

play

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plays

an important role and bring different people in touch with each other.

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this

essay, I will give my view with an appropriate example. On the one hand, Electronics gadgets brought so many

convient

suited to your comfort or purpose or needs

convenient

convents

changes in

everyone

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everyone's

life.

Moreover

, it has

it is

it's

own

benefical

promoting or enhancing well-being

beneficial

to living humans.

For example

, due to Social Media

such

as Facebook, Instagram, Google Duo lots of human beings can keep in touch with their distant relatives and some school friends by Video calls and

also

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with

online chat.

Furthermore it's

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Furthermore, it's

also

due to new and advance gym equipments people prefer to go to various health clubs, so they can stay fit and

their

in or at that place

there

they're

also

they meet different persons and make friends there too. According to one survey, Electronically items, play praise worthy role during

Covid19 situation

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a Covid19 situation

Covid19 situations

in India during Lockdown when

billion

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a billion

of people stay

indoor

within a building

indoors

On the other hand

, there are

also

some advance effects of

its

the thing named or in question

To begin

with, some parents believe that due to extreme use of these gadgets their children are getting isolated as they involve themselves in games

such

as PubG and candy crush

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etc

continuing in the same way

etc.

, so much that they forget their

surrounding

the environmental condition

surroundings

Additionally

due

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Due

to using technique humans are getting physical ailments due to their

depencency

the state of relying on or being controlled by someone or something else

dependency

on these. According to one prestige survey by Oxford university, Old people, who living their lives without using these gadgets are more active and healthy. To recapitulate, Electronic devices are blessing for many

other

plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned

others

who wants to close with relatives and even with children who study abroad, only if they can use it in

proper way

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a proper way

Wed May 06 2020

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Some people think that Modern Technology is making people more sensible, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both points and give your opinion

Fully explain your ideas

News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words.

An increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. Why is this the case, and what solutions are possible?

Some people think the manufacturers or shopping malls should sell less packaged products and others argue that people have the responsibility to buy products with less packaging. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Motor vehicle crashes are one of the leading cause of teen deaths. To prevent such road accidents, the government should ban people under 24 to drive motor cycles. To what extent do you agree or degree?