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The success of a country is often determined by their economic power.

Economic power is indeed considered the most important indicator of a nation’s success. I believe that some other factors are just as important as an economic power. And without these factors, a
country
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 cannot exist, as well as without resources and a strong economy.
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Firstly I
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Firstly, I
 know, that poor countries, where there are a lot of resources and the economy of
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country
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 quite well, just can't give its citizens normal benefits of living, like a good salary or products. And in
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 particular situation, resources for a
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 mean practically nothing, because its citizens simply survive and make ends meet. A state that has natural resources must properly dispose of them.
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 a strong and economically large provincial like India simply cannot date, its citizens enough goods for a comfortable stay inside it. High technology and overpopulation simply cannot get along in one
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 and
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 not everyone in India lives at the level of
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 economic development. People receive smaller salaries and are unable to pay for living, and sometimes food. India is an example where an economically strong
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 cannot provide the benefits of living. In conclusion, I want to say that all the factors of a successful
country
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 are very important and if even one is missing
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country
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 can hardly be called successful.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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