The chart below shows the different level of post school qualification in Australia

The chart below shows the different level of post school qualification in Australia
The chart below gives information about various
estimate
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estimates
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of post-school experience in Australia and
percentage
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the percentage
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rate
of two
gender
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genders
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who had them in 1999.
Overall
, when
looked
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looking
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at the table in general, there are contrasts in maximum and minimum rates.
While
shilled vocational
credentials
is
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are
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in the highest amount for
males
, it is in the lowest
rate
for females in 1999. Similar to
this
contrast, the highest percentage
in
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of
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undergraduate
credentials
is for females,
while
the lowest
rate
in
this
diploma
is for
males
in the same year. When
looked
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looking
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at the chart for
males
in detail,
a
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the
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skilled vocational
credentials
percentage which has the highest
raterate
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rate rate
reiterate
for is 90%.
This
rate
is followed by
postgraduate
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the postgraduate
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credentials
rate
with
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of
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%70 in 1999. The lowest
rate
for
males
is an undergraduate
diploma
in 1999. Just
after
this
rate
, the
second
lowest
rate
for
male
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males
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is
bachelor’s
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a bachelor’s
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degree. When
looked
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looking
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at the chart for females in detail, as I mentioned in the
overall
paragraph,
maximum
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the maximum
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and minimum
rate
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rates
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are
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the exact
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exact
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opposite.
Maximum
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The maximum
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rate
is undergraduate
credentials
and
minimum
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the minimum
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rate
is a skilled vocational
diploma
in
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apply
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this
year. These rates are respectively, followed by
bachelor’s
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a bachelor’s
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degree which was the
second
highest
rate
and by postgraduate
diploma
which was the
second
lowest
rate
in 1999.
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