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Social media marketing can influence what consumers buy. Do you agree or disagree? To what extent do you agree?

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Men without marketing is like a fish without water. Social networking sites are highly used by people all over the world. Many companies are using
this
 mode good way to promote for people attract their market, which helpful for their company. I agree that marketing, which happen to get a source of information in
s
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on
ocial sites. Social media is convenient for marketing. In the contemporary era, the multinational companies put their banners on every social si
tes.
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site
Moreover
, online posters are showing again and again, when we are online in
t
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at
on
hese social sites.
For instance
, when we start to use Yo
u-tube,
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YouTube
Instagram and many more ap
plication,
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applications
we show many advertising videos on 2 to 3 mi
nutes a
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minute
dvertisement, and go through we
bsite.
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the website
They publish their advertisement by social media information.
Hence
, more people should go to visit in
s
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on
o
cial site.
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a social site
social sites
the social site
Furthermore
, the main target company sales their product how to retail to customers, and how to expand their business and benefits.
For instance
, amazon and Flipkart companies to advertise their product from social networking sites. They expand their income on social sites.
Therefore
, people ar
e very relate t
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are very related
are very relating
o
follow n
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to following
e
w trend a
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the new trend
a new trend
new trends
nd they want to be up
date e
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updated
very day on so
cial site.
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a social site
social sites
the social site
 On the flip side, old people do not adjust to new changes easily. Mostly they prefer to buy new things from sh
opkeeper.
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the shopkeeper
a shopkeeper
shopkeepers
Young customers are using to ac
tive o
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act
actively
n so
cial site,
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social sites
a social site
the social site
and youngsters who, influenced by current trends. In conclusion, the rise in online retail stores ar
e expanding t
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is expanding
heir transactions online.
This
 makes it easy for the consumers to purchase from everywhere.
However
, old people should use to advance advertisement.

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