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In the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers, the internet and smartphones, more and more people are starting to work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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It goes without saying that
workplace
Suggestion
the workplace
 has been one of the most controversial notions over the
last
 few decades. While the majority of people would use a means of transportation to commute to
work
, others have been in favour of working at
home
 thanks to the recent advances in the field of technology. There are some benefits and drawbacks to the development of
this
 field of technology.
To begin
 with, there is a magnitude of advantages to
this
 breakthrough which was able to add a new whole dimension to our lives. No matter how long people can
work
 to finish their tasks at
home
, it will be deducted from the
time
 they used to spend to reach their workplace, so even though they worked longer hours at
home
, it will be much easier than using any vehicles to go to
work
.
In addition
 to saving
time
, they would save a great deal of money they used to spend on the expenses of travelling to
work
.
Furthermore
, not only can they spend more
time
 with their families or socialize with kin, friends or even neighbours, they can
also
 make the most of
this
time
 to develop themselves and their skills.
However
, from a different perspective, critics of working at
home
 argue that it has a lot of disadvantages. It is argued that by dint of working at
home
, people may suffer a host of mental and physical illnesses
such
 as depression and obesity.
Moreover
, should there be any technical failure or awful broadband connection, a lot of people will not be able to do the
work
 needed on a regular basis.
This
, in turn, may result in
highly
Suggestion
higher
 catastrophic aftermaths for both of the employees, employers and their firms. To conclude, there are a lot of disadvantages to working at
home
 as opposed to travelling at
home
. I have arrived at the conclusion that working at
home
 is much more beneficial on the condition that to guarantee a well-established internet connection.

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