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Present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults coma compared with the number of older people does the advantage of this situation outweigh the disadvantages.

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It is a true fact that teenagers are relatively large in comparison for senior citizens in
this
 I will discuss positive and negative and how it will be helpful for everyone. To embark, everyone nowadays wants their
work
 to get complete to before time and they don't want any delay in their industry. In that context, everybody today loves to prefer youth of
this
 nation, whatever field of
work
 it may be.
Moreover
, the positive effect of
this
 for youth is that they learn some of the skills in their life in which maybe
also
 help them in their upcoming life.
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t
Suggestion
On
he other hand, it may seem sometimes that other people get humiliated not to do
work
 and time, so in that view, it may be a good choice for elder one to have a rest at home and enjoy their rest of life with their granddaughter grandson.
fu
rthermore,
in addition
Furthermore
is the economy of a particular country do well in which mostly used are at
wo
rk
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work, then
then
 it may be beneficial for older people to provide good pension plans in their hard times
in addition
 to
this
 they may go around the world for a vacation to see beautiful cites in
this
 world. In conclusion, I want want to conclude that it's good to have a youth of our country at
wo
rk but i
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work, but
t may decrease well-experienced person which are the seniors of any particular provincial.

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