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Today's teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations.

#teenagers #lives #generations
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 is the way the body responds to a challenge and prepares to meet a tough position with focus, strength, determination, and heightened strength.
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Stress
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 among teenagers has grown rapidly in the past century. School is one of the elevated reasons in the field of
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stress
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. Bullying is a long-time story that causes chronic
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s
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tress which
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stress, which
is long- term
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stress
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. That makes teens not confident to show t
hemself,
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themselves
 and tends to think much about how they acting in the class. Students will send more time thinking what others think about t
hemself
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themselves
than thinking about their
l
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ife
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lives
and the effect of
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 situation will have on their
life
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. Grades are
also
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 a big
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stress
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 leader in schools. Some students try to hard to impress others being teachers, parents, and peers with their work even they don’t really have it in them.
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 may lead to teens set t
he high
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higher
the highest
expectations for t
hemself
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themselves
and may get the disappointment if they not reach it. Adolescent’s
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stress
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 is more common than you may think. It's the time where they are about to be on their own, they have huge decisions to make about their future and their goals, and what they are going to do with their
life
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 whether to do with their education, work, and even personal
life
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.
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Stress
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 in teens is simple to i
dentify
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Identify
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 as depression, sleep deprivation, eating disorder, or physical change. There are many different ways to solve
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stress
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 problems. Therapy is a process that can help but may be on the expensive s
ide but
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side, but
if needed is much recommended. The most common and best way in my opinion to solve a
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stress
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 problem is to simply get over your fear of embarrassment and talk to somebody, maybe your family, or friends, anybody that will make you comfortable and tend to help you if
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 problem is t
ell.
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telling
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Stress
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 is a very serious matter that shouldn’t be taken lightly. As s
tated there’s
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stated, there’s
many consequences that can follow a
life
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 full of
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stress
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, being
life
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 damage, failure, and even death.
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, there’s ways to manage and cut off the
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stress
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 so teenagers may have a m
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more comfortable
life
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