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What are the benefits and drawbacks of immigration or multi-cultural societies?

#immigration #societies
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It is obvious that even developed countries
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 face their problems, which have not been solved now and
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,
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 as violence, drugs,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
… including population. One of the reasons, which make population rates skyrocketed increasing, is
immigration
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, in some aspects,
immigration
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 is not one of the negative issues. In some countries,
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, in the USA,
immigration
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 is one of the fundamental building blocks that help make America the unique nation that it is. From my point of view,
immigration
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 or multi-cultural societies have benefits and drawbacks. One the one hand,
immigration
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, and multi-cultural societies have a variety of advantages. From an economic perspective,
immigration
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 can be extremely positive. In the
urbanization
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urban
 areas, many industries will potentially experience a significant shortage of workers in its more
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
-intensive sectors. The immigrants will solve the lack of
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 issues.
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, many immigrants have skills that are suitable in the country they move to. Immigrants who find work will contribute to the economy of their new country by their products and strong sales. Many immigrants send money home to help family members.
Immigration
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 creates cultural diversity. People of many different nationalities learn to live together.
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 can help people to become more open-minded and tolerant Negatives of
Immigration
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. Some people believe that immigrants take jobs that should go to local people. Some immigrant workers work longer hours for less money. Companies might pay lower salaries to immigrant workers. Unemployment rates could rise if there are too many immigrants.

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