More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

It is true that wild animals are on the edge of extermination to a greater extent as well as on the threatened list. There are

variety

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a variety

of possible reasons for the extinction of wildlife, but steps can definitely be taken by

government

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to tackle

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problem. In my opinion, three main factors are associated

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with

eradication of nature animals.

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, Unsustainable growth of

population

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the population

need inhabitants for living

purpose

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purposes

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, people cut down enormous areas of rainforest which destroys increasing amount of wildlife habitats.

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, wild animals often experience different type of

danger

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danger, such

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overhunting

excessive heating

overheating

of animals,

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, and introduction of invasive species and so on.

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, it causes wild

animals

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animal

animal's

life in danger.

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, greenhouse gases make environment polluted

that is

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unbearable for some species.

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, animals’ life can be uninhabitable. There are several solutions to those worrying problems and I firmly believe that the change must start with the

government

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. Natural areas and wild animals should be protected by the authorities. A

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measure would be creating strict laws for those people who are involved with shooting animals for their pleasure as well as the food source.

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scientists are researched on some offensive

species but

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species, but

administration

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the administration

should

look upon of

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look upon

this

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matter so that they can stay out of

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new producing problem.

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government

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campaigns should promote awareness of planting trees regularly and imposing rules against pollution. In conclusion, the problem of extinction of wild animals will continue to

arise

move upward

rise

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with the right action taken by

government

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the issue can be tackled sensibly and easily.

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May 10, 2020

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