More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawback

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Nowadays

execessive number

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the excessive number

excessive number

of students are willing to study in universities developed countries. In my

opinion there

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opinion, there

are more merits

such

as self independent, employment opportunities

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saving

money

and so forth rather than demerits. In

this

upcoming paragraph

refers to the speaker or writer

will support my opinion.

Firstly

, they become independent and responsible in abroad because in another country they have to make their own decisions for their life nobody there

for

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support him.

Then

, he

break

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breaks

the

dependancy

the state of relying on or being controlled by someone or something else

dependency

dependence

dependencies

from their parents. Apart from that, they come to know the value of

money

because they

havd

have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense

have

had

to pay the fees

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rents

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bills and many more.

Therefore they

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Therefore, they

do not waste their

money

on useless things as well as save their

money

for the future.

Morever

in addition

Moreover

, the colleges are more focus on

paractical

concerned with actual use or practice

practical

skills and based on latest technology.

Hence they

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Hence, they

can easily grasp the information about the

electronics

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electronic

devices. Turning to the disadvantages of visiting

being one more than one

two

forign

of concern to or concerning the affairs of other nations (other than your own)

foreign

countries.

First

of all

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they can indulge in bad company and started to

doing

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the wrong things

such

as drugs, thefts, smoking and many more.

Thus they

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Thus, they

Thus them

Thus them them

dustract

having the attention diverted especially because of anxiety

distracted

from their goal.

Nevertheless some

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Nevertheless, some

students

are suffered

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are suffering

have suffered

suffer

from emotional pain because in strange country there is nobody to take care them as well as they feel lonely.

As a

result they

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result, they

can not

cannot

concentrate on their studies. To sum up studying in abroad is golden chance for the students who want to go there ad it provides

lot

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a lot

lots

of facilities.

However there

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However, there

are some drawbacks of

this

trend but

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trend, but

if student do their work

with firm

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with, firm

determination they can easily make the career.

Mon May 11 2020

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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawback

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people believe that it is unnecessary to teach children about handwriting skills in our modern age. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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