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The Internet has informed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the Internet? What are the best ways to solve them?

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Although
 the Internet has changed how
information
 is spread and used, it has caused issues that did not happen in the past.
This
 essay will discuss the problems caused by the Internet and suggest some feasible solutions that governments can adopt to address these ones. There are several main problems which are caused by the Internet. The
first
 one is that some individuals spread inaccurate
information
 about politics on many websites and social networking sites
such
 as sharing reactionary documents and distorted
information
 on the Vietnamese authorities, which might lead to the citizens of a nation losing trust in state agencies. The
second
 matter is the growing appearance of dangerous websites, and a typical example of
this
 is Deep web, containing pornographic images and sensitive content on trading in human organs or deadly weapons
.
Accept space
.
As a result
, those who are often curious about those internet sites will be obsessed think negatively and behave aggressively. There are several effective measures that governments can take to tackle.
First
 of all,
authorities
Suggestion
the authorities
 impose administrative fines for sharing misinformation and prison sentences for providing State secrets or reactionary
information
 that can pose serious threats to the national security of a nation, which will act as a deterrent for those intending to have similar actions.
Additionally
, state officials can order telecommunication companies to block websites through passing a law of internet use
such
 as the Ministry of
Information
 and Communication in
Vietnam forcing
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Vietnam, forcing
 telecom giants including Viettel, VNPT and FPT to prevent Vietnamese internet users from accessing these sites, which encourages young people under the age of 18 to concentrate on their learning. In conclusion, despite the fact that
Internet
Suggestion
the Internet
 has resulted in serious problems
such
 as posting misinformation on the Internet and users browsing banned webs, high-ranking leaders can alleviate these by imposing heavy fines and introducing stringent regulations regarding the use of the Internet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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